Chapter 3 reactions

 Phenomenal! God I love writing. The reactions to chapter 3 have been great. So many people interested and even discussing theories, critiquing certain choices, and offering their own two cents. Today is a very good day.

Some extra stuff to talk about. I made a mistake when doing chapter 3, I had a bandit use minya which is a fairly rare spell. The main reason I did, besides allow Subaru a way to kill the guy, is that it was funny to me having another rare yin magic user ineffectually fighting Subaru. He was meant to be a sort of dark reflection of Subaru: loud mouthed, yin magic, uses a whip, leader type, and generally weak. He’s what Subaru could have become if he was more scrupulous and less smart, sort of like those one piece good ending bad ending memes. 

Anyway I forgot minya was made by echidna, meaning the only way this bandit could have learned it is if he learned from her or Beatrice. Which is a stretch for suspension of disbelief. Comments pointed it out and I agreed. It feels good having people do that considering my wish is for this fic to be something people will wanna read again and again.

In addition, there were two other concerns: OP greed authority and some overuses of humor. Op greed authority makes sense considering we are seeing things from Anastasia’s pov. If we were seeing from subaru, there would be a lot more insight into why that ability cannot be used like that so often. I’ve already outlined what the ability does so hopefully when more is revealed, that ability becomes less of a concern. Either way, the point of the fic isn’t combat which will make this less of a consistent flaw.

The second is overuse of humor. A lot of moments people had problems with were usually written because I thought it was funny. As a result, some moments like Anastasia resorting to kicking the bandit in the dick, bandit guy using minya, and Anastasia being jealous innately have come to become points of contention for other reasons. OOC Anastasia, doesn’t make sense based on canon, and rushing romance when not needed (especially for slow burn). All valid points. It’s hard to balance what I think would be entertaining vs trying to make the fic consistent as possible with canon personalities and logic. Doyalist vs watsonian if you will. And I love it. Like a challenge it makes me want to write better, to accomplish both like a greedy little gremlin. To make people still love my work in spite of the mistakes or even be amazed by it improving even more. 

Fun, fun, fun! Anyway, the only problem I’m having right now is the fact I’m doing everything on phone. Meaning I’ll always have some grammar or spelling errors i miss. Especially since I’m doing this all while traveling. 

To finish off, next chapter will be next Monday and it might be a bit controversial. We’ll see how people react and I’m excited to see how it goes.